Sela Locke

See, I'm not one for nitpicking, so I'll just tell you what I think. I liked it. It definitely needs to be longer, and you should proofread it for typos ...

There's something nagging at the back of my mind about it, and since you wanted honesty, I'mma try to figure it out. Does it feel insincere? Or maybe it just ...

Hullo! I'm Sela A. Locke and I...will be your reviewer today. First off, you're rushing everything! The entire story is telling, telling, telling. He did this, she did that, he ...

I'mma be honest--I stopped reading after about a paragraph. Wanna know why? Probably not. I'll tell you anyways. It's called a hook. Something that, from the very start, draws the ...

Huh. Well, so far this is pretty generic, right? A shy guy who like a girl but can't tell her because she's too pretty, or too popular, or dating some ...

Well it was cute, that much I'll give you. But of course I have about a zillion questions, 'specially because, well, I love Star Trek. First off, why did Captain ...

I'mma be short about this, okay? Here's my honest-to-God opinion. It could be interesting. This could be exciting, intriguing, heart-poundingly fantastic...if it weren't so choppy. Because it's very,

Well, you asked for someone to rip it apart, and here I am. -bows gracefully- At y'service, marm. Let's make this quick, shall we? =D The halls were white. I ...

(Let's get right down to it, shall we?) The beginning chapter grabbed me. I liked it, bar a few grammatical errors and such, and wanted to read more. After that, ...

I think all the other reviewers got everything, pretty much. And I agree with it, but as I was cruising down through all the critiquing, I kept searching for the ...

Wow. So here's the thing, cheri . You have this way about your writing that makes people feel like they just finished being high when they get to the end ...

I don't nitpick so I guess I'll get right to it. You need a lot of practice. The basic skeleton of this was passable, almost, but the dialogue was flat, ...

Maybe. Stop saying incongruous. Will you play Mario Party with me and Max tomorrow? It's less fun with two people than three or four. You're depressing, and I think sincerity ...

Carmen was already perched casually on the porch steps when I left the house. I don't really like nitpicking, but this really screamed out to me. Maybe I'm just crazy, ...

Okay, before anything else, I just want to say that this was adorable. Straight-up, no strings attached, adorable . Onto the review! This is a short story, yes? Well, in ...